【11408学习记录】考研英语写作实战指南：2008年道歉信真题深度解析与高分模板

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写作

2008年考研英语真题小作文

Directions: You have just come back from Canada and found a music CD in your luggage that you forgot to return to Bob, your landlord there. Write him a letter to

1. make an apology, and
2. suggest a solution. Do not sign your own name at the end of the letter. Use "Li Ming" instead. Do not write the address. (10 points)

题目分析

这是一封道歉信。写信人李明从加拿大回来后，发现自己行李中有一张本应归还给加拿大房东鲍勃(Bob)的音乐CD。考生需要：1)写信向鲍勃道歉；2)提出解决方案。

写作思路

第一段

本文是一封写给房东鲍勃的信，无须自我介绍，因此采用私人信件（问候致意+表明目的）的框架。

第二段

需要基于题目，灵活修改以下锦囊妙句，通过合理的串联，快速构建一篇内容翔实、理由充分的文章。以下是备选锦囊妙句：

锦囊妙句 13

1. 《红楼梦》很有启发性，每次阅读这本书都会有不同的体会。非常适合像你这样的初学者/外国人。

==Dream of the Red Chamber== is very inspiring, and each ==reading== of ==this book== brings different insights. It's highly suitable for beginners/foreigners like you.

《红楼梦》很有启发性，每次阅读这本书都会有不同的体会。非常适合像你这样的外国人。

Dream of the Red Chamber is very inspiring，and each reading of this book brings different insights. It's highly suitable for foreigners like you.

锦囊妙句 17

1. 生活可能是不可预测的，充满这各种意外。昨天，我突然收到通知，必须参加一场强制性的学术会议，这迫使我改变了原定的计划。

Life can be unpredictable and full of surprises. Yesterday, I received a sudden notification that I must attend a mandatory academic meeting, which forced me to change my plans.

生活可能是不可预测的，充满着各种意外。昨天，我突然收到通知，必须参加一场强制性的学术会议，这迫使我改变了原定的计划，并且在今天回到了中国。

Life can be unpredictable and full of surprises.Yesterday,I received a sudden notification that I must attend a mandatory academic meeting,which forced me to change my plans ==and return to China today==.

第三段

再次致歉。

妙句成文

Dear Bob, I hope this letter finds you well. My purpose of this letter is to ==apologize for forgetting to return the music CD to you when I left Canada==.

Life can be unpredictable and full of surprises. Yesterday, I received a sudden notification that I must attend a mandatory academic meeting, which forced me to change my plans ==and return to China today==. [妙句17] ==When I opened the suitcase, I was shocked to find your CD in my bag. I feel truly sorry about this. As a remedy, I'd like to mail the CD back to you at my own expense, and I'll also send you a copy of Dream of the Red Chamber. This book== is very inspiring, and each reading of this book brings different insights. It's highly suitable for foreigners like you. [妙句13]

Once again, I deeply regret any inconvenience caused and hope that you can accept my apology and understand my situation.

Yours sincerely, Li Ming

每日一句

It was not until the mid-1980s, when amplifying age and sex differences became a dominant children's marketing strategy, that pink fully came into its own, when it began to seem inherently attractive to girls, part of what defined them as female, at least for the first few critical years. (2012, Reading Comprehension, Part A Text 2)

词汇

amplify: v. 扩大，增强 dominant: adj. 首要的；统治的；有支配力的；占优势的 marketing strategy: 营销策略 come into its own: 进入繁盛期 inherently: adv. 固有地；天生地，天性地 critical: adj. 关键的，决定性的；批评的；评论的

第一步：找谓语

It ==was== not until the mid-1980s, when amplifying age and sex differences ==became== a dominant children's marketing strategy, that pink fully ==came== into its own, when it ==began== to seem inherently attractive to girls, part of what ==defined== them as female, at least for the first few critical years.

第二步：断句

原句中有5个谓语动词，包含5件事，可以断开为5句话：

• was 为主句中的强调句式it was not …… that中的谓语
• became 为非限定性定语从句中的谓语
• came 为主句中的谓语
• began 为时间状语从句中的谓语
• defined 为宾语从句中的谓语

按照标点符号、引导词以及谓语进行划分可以得到以下分句：

• It ==was== not until the mid-1980s that pink fully ==came== into its own, —— 主句
  • It ==was== not until the mid-1980s that —— 强调句式
  • pink fully ==came== into its own —— 主句核心
• , when amplifying age and sex differences ==became== a dominant children's marketing strategy, —— 非限制性定语从句，解释说明主句时间 mid-1980s
• when it ==began== to seem inherently attractive to girls, part of, at least for the first few critical years. —— 时间状语从句，补充说明主句发生的时间
• what ==defined== them as female —— 宾语从句，与介词of组成名词part的后置定语，解释说明part

第三步：简化

主句

It was not until the mid-1980s that pink fully came into its own

• 强调句式：It was not until the mid-1980s that 强调主句发生时间 —— 直到20世纪80年代中期才……
• not until the mid-1980s 为时间状语，说明主句发生的时间
  • not until表示直到……才的否定时间概念
• 名词pink为主句主语
• 副词fully修饰谓语动词came
• 介词短语into its own 为方向状语，修饰动词came，表示方向

去掉主句的扩展部分就得到了句子的核心：

• It was …… that pink …… came …… —— 正是……粉色……来了……

非限制性定语从句

, when amplifying age and sex differences became a dominant children's marketing strategy,

• when 非限制性定语从句引导词，为句子核心
• 动名词短语：amplifying age and sex differences 从句主语部分
  • amplifying 为核心动词
  • 名词age与sex differences作为动词amplifying的宾语构成从句主语
  • 名词sex修饰名词differences
• 系动词 became 为从句谓语部分，后接表语，从句结构为主系表
• a dominant children's marketing strategy 从句表语部分
  • 不定冠词a修饰名词strategy
  • 形容词dominant修饰名词strategy
  • 名词所有格children's 修饰名词strategy
  • 名词marketing修饰名词strategy
  • 名词strategy为表语核心语

去掉从句的扩展部分就得到了句子的核心：

• when amplifying age and …… differences became …… strategy —— 当放大年龄和……差异变成……策略时

时间状语从句

when it began to seem inherently attractive to girls, part of, at least for the first few critical years.

• when 从句引导词，为句子核心
• it为从句主语
• began为从句谓语，与动词不定式to seem 共同构成谓语动词短语
• 动词不定式to seem inherently attractive 为动词began的宾语
  • 非谓语动词to seem为系动词，后接表语
  • 副词 inherently 修饰形容词 attractive
  • 形容词attractive 为系动词seem的表语
• 介词短语 to girls为表语attractive的补足语
• part of与后面的what引导的并于从句共同构成名词短语，作为同位语，解释说明表语attractive
• at least for the first few critical years 为时间状语，修饰主句，表示主句发生的时间
  • 程度副词at least修饰时间状语
  • 介词短语for the first few critical years为时间状语核心部分

去掉从句的扩展部分就得到了句子的核心：

• when it began to seem …… attractive …… —— 当它开始看起来……吸引人……时

宾语从句

what defined them as female

• what 引导从句，为句子核心
• defined 为从句谓语部分
• them 为从句宾语
• 介词短语 as female 作为从句宾语补足语，补充说明宾语them，为句子核心

去掉从句的扩展部分就得到了句子的核心：

• what defined them as female —— 什么定义他们为女性